Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some problems associated with reliance on computer and what are some of the possible solutions

Now ,days as technology is growing quickly pupils becoming more and more dependent on computers .
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convenient education is made by the use of technology,
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associated problems
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which I am going to discuss and try to provide possible solutions for the same. First of all young
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are spending more and more time online either studying or playing games which is promoting a sedentary lifestyle in them, Adding
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their social life is suffering as much as their physical health is.
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social
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communication skills. For a clear illustration, in a recent ,
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that using any device for 4 hours straight has a
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impact on the eyes and brain leading to depression and other brain-related problems. On the other ,hand these detrimental impacts on children can be minimised by the collective efforts of the school, parents, and society . For ,example schools can make sports
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mandatory part of
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and encourage their students to adopt a proactive life,
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society and parents can organise sports events for
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adolescents . In ,addition guardians can put restrictions on the use of technology in the home environment to increase human interactions. In,
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conclusion I believe that it all depends on us how we use the resources and to what extent.
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responsible citizens of society it's our duty to keep
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next generation's actions in check and provide them with proper guidance .
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