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The bar charts describe the information about the
ticket
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 cost between two cities in Australia namely Sydney and Melbourne over two weeks periods in 2013, units are measured in
dollars
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. Overall, it is clear that Friday and Saturday represent the largest portion of the
ticket
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price
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, whereas weekdays is undoubted the smallest. According to the graph illustrates, in Sydney to Melbourne, in the
first
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week
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, Monday was stood at $80, which is the majority of the
ticket
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 cost, but in the
second
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week
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,
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 proportion was reduced gradually, with an average of 30
dollars
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. Friday and Saturday
ticket
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 cost was maintained the same
price
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 these both weeks, which is 75
dollars
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 and 70
dollars
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 respectively. In terms of Melbourne to Sydney
ticket
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price
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, in the
first
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week
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, Friday was $80, but the
second
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week
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this
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 was reduced marginally by $20. In the
first
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week
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, Monday to Saturday were the same amount of
ticket
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price
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, at $60. In the
second
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week
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 of weekends maintained the same amount of
ticket
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price
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, which is 50
dollars
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.
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