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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #sports #event #country
I agreed when a
country
 becomes a
host
 in an international
event
. of ,course there is advantage and disadvantage to
this
 topic . the advantage
about
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of
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 becoming a
host
 is the other
country
 who join to participate
the
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in the
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 competition will know more about that county who becomes a
host
.
however
 as a
host
 in
an
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apply
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international sports events that you can show or introduce something about your
country
for example
 introduce the traditional food, clothes, tourist attraction,etc. after becoming a
host
 and introducing our traditional food, clothes, tourist attraction,etc. many foreign people will get interested to
come
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tocome
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 your county and it will help a
country
 to increase the economy.
For example
. the most favourite place frequently visited by foreigners
is
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in
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 Bali. there the Indonesian government always promote Bali as a beautiful place that must visit when coming to Indonesia.
although
 not only the benefit about being a
host
 in an international sports
event
 but
also
 there is a disadvantage about it. some people think that becoming a
host
 is a bad idea because they think the facilities owned by the
host
 county is not as good as overseas facilities and they think it will be embarrassing the
country
that is
 becoming a
host
 in an international sports
event
.
Furthermore
, many people think that if the overseas athlete
come
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 to the
country
 who
are
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is
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 a
host
 it will make traffic jams in many places because we needed to prioritize the athletes
first
. For me, there is more benefit than disadvantage about being a
host
 in an international
event
 because the
competition
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 spirit of the athletes who
host
 an
event
 will continue to become enthusiastic
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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