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The table describes the information about the
number
 of tourists and expenditure in the UK over the seven
years
periods
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period
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 from 2003 to 2008. Overall, it can be seen that clearly,
number
 of
visits
 spend and average spend per
visits
 these were increased from the starting, whereas, average nights per
visits
 were reduced from the starting. According to the graph illustrates, in 2003,tourists numbers were 24,715, after three
years
 later,
this
 was raised gradually, with an average of 32,778, but in 2008,
number
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the number
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 of
visits
 had reduced slightly,
at
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to
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 31.88.
Similarly
, spending money in 2003,
this
 was represented 11,855,
this
 was increased in each year gradually and end of the year reached at 16,323 pounds. In terms of average spend per visit in the starting period,
this
 figure was accounted for 475, after the
next
 year,
this
 proportion was diminished slightly by9.
In contrast
, in 2005, there was a gradual rise from 2005 to 2008 from 471 to 511.
In
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 average nights per
visits
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visit
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, in 2003 and 2004, these both
years
 had the same amount, which is 8.2, but 2005 to 2006,
this
 ratio was increased from 8.3 to 8.4.
Similarly
,
2007
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from 2007
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 to 2008,
these
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apply
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both
years
 had the same
number
 of average nights per visit, which is 7.7.
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