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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

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In 2010, in
India
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 nearly 30 per cent of the population lives in urban
areas
 while nearly 70 per cent of the population lives in rural fields. But currently,
this
 trend is changing, a
lot
 of
people
 are shifting from rural or urban
areas
 to metro
cities
such
 as Delhi, Mumbai Kolkata and Bengaluru. When
people
 shift from their native place to metro
cities
 they have to deal with a
lot
 of problems.
This
 essay will highlight the problems that human beings encounter when they migrate to a large city and how can the authority motivate them to move to their regional places. The
first
 problem, they face is finding a cheap apartment. As a
lot
 of
people
 are residing in the large
cities
 so the price of a house is like touching the sky or we can say finding a flat or house at a low price is a very difficult task, even rent of the house is
also
 high. Due to
this
, poor
people
 have to live in slum
areas
. In slum
areas
, water, sanitation and hygiene are not good. Due to
this
, they develop water-borne diseases.
Secondly
, the price of groceries is very high. The
third
 problem is the pollution in these
cities
 is very high, it can create respiratory disorders. Despite these problems,
people
 still continue to live in the metro
cities
 due to better education and employment. The government are launching an of
lot
 schemes to help
people
 like urban development schemes or urban health centres. Apart from it, the government can take new initiatives like providing job opportunities in their regional towns. The ministry should encourage MSME and entrepreneurs for creating opportunities. In conclusion, the government should initiate infrastructure development in towns so that
people
 can live in their own town and
also
 get employment.
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