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In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #children #people #government #responsibility
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Recently widespread fast-
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 restaurants and fast delivery programs lead to more getting unhealthy
food
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 especially to the
children
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 which gain more weight and became inactive. some people argue that the government should take the lead to solve
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 issue. I tend to agree with
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 notion, but we
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 have to consider the
parents
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' role. As the
Children
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's overweight has drawn wide public attention. administration
centers
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 should have their plan and ways to solve
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 issue.
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, Regular awareness programs for
kids
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 and
parents
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 on Tv shows or newspapers discuss the importance of healthy
food
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 and
sports
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 in all fields of our life.
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, the government should build public fitness clubs and
sports
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centers
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 for youngsters and
kids
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 free of charge.
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 will help people to have a proper understanding and train their
kids
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 and avoid them getting fat.
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, we could not neglect the role of
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 in controlling their
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's
food
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 and sugary items and guiding them to live healthily.
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, Mothers should prepare healthy and homemade
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 for
kids
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 and stop getting a fast-
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,
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 do not allow excessive eating of candies and sugary drinks.
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,
parents
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 have to encourage the
children
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 to practice
sports
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 in their free time. If we follow
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 program, we will enhance our
kids
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 physically and mentally To Summarize, Healthy life for
children
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 is a shared responsibility between governments and
parents
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. Government should provide the facility for their citizens to practice
sports
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 while
parents
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 should control the bad eating habits.
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