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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes . Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person #culture #character #choice #clothes
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It is generally believed that an individual dressing
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 a lot about their personality and culture. I strongly agree with
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 statement. In
this
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essay
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 I will give some reasons along with examples that how clothes play
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 role in recognition of a
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person
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 tradition.
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, many
people
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 invariably wear clothes according to their tradition ,for they represent their religion by it. There are many cultures and traditions in the same religions of
people
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 who
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 what are they wearing, and especially the
color
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 of the dressing matters to them depending on different genders.
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 of
people
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 are Muslims,
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, there are a variety of traditions and cultures for separate areas and provinces. Like in
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 of Punjab everyone has their own style of dressing.
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 in KPK appearance of
people
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 is very difficult as compared to Punjab or any other province. To illustrate,
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the male
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male
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males
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 cannot wear dark
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colors
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such
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 as red.,pink and orange while
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the female
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female
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females
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 can wear the same
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colors
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.
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female
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females
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 wear trousers, long shift along with scarf which
is sometimes not wore
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is sometimes not worn
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 by other area
people
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.
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, by
clothing
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 an individual personality can
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 be judged very easily because t is an overall look of every
person
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 which he/she selects for themselves.
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, many
people
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 who wear bright
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colors
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 with fitted stitching are mostly lively and fashionable.
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, those who wear loose and light
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colours
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colors
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 are boring and dull.
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 those who are always suited if they are going for
job
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the job
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 are the punctual and tidy
one
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. After having discussed the
perinent
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pertinent
 points it can be inferred that appearance of a
person
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 can predict their culture as well as character. In my
opinion
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 dressing depicts a
person
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's
personalty
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personality
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 and religion and we should always respect everyone clothing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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