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SOME EMPLOYERS WANT TO BE ABLE TO CONTACT THEIR STAFF AT ALL TIMES, EVEN ON HOLIDAYS. DOES THIS DEVELOPMENT HAVE MORE ADVANTAGES THAN DISADVANTAGES.

#employers #contact #staff #times #holidays #development
In the world of globalization, there is
blood
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 bath in all sectors.
This
 makes companies
to
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give
best
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the best
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 possible result throughout the year. As a consequence, employers keep their
employees
 on
the
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 toes, irrespective of vacation or holidays. In
this
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 we would see it has more demerits than merits.
Firstly
, owners often want to control their
employees
to
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by
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 not giving them
freedom
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the freedom
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 to enjoy holidays. Controlling
employees
 can create a negative impact on
employees
.
For instance
, productivity hampers
employees
do
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who do
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 not have sufficient personal time.
Moreover
,
this
 can hamper the companies
performance
 in long run.
Secondly
, more control can lead to
surge
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a surge
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 in
hiring
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the hiring
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 process.
For instance
, more discipline and demanding best
performance
 on daily basis can increase anxiety and stress levels as
employees
 have
lack
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 of leverage on their employers.
Moreover
,
this
 leads to
low
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 retention ratio in
company
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the company
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 which can incur high costs to hire.
Therefore
, it has adverse effects. On the other side,
employees
 working on their off time can grasp
task
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tasks
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 and achieve excellence
quickly
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more quickly
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 than others.
This
 routine can create an employee’s edge to compete faster than other
employees
.
Additionally
, it can help company
getting
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 their desired results. But
this
 has adverse impacts on companies productivity and higher expenses. In summary, owners who are over strict on their
employees
 for working will have higher drawbacks than benefits from
this
 rule. As per me, good
performance
 can be achieved by keeping leniency at least in holidays which can give their
employees
 relaxation and get
surge
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a surge
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 in quality
performance
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Constant connectivity
  • Workplace availability
  • Crisis management
  • Decision-making
  • Competitive edge
  • Prompt response
  • Flexibility
  • Autonomy
  • Remote work
  • Work-life balance
  • Stress
  • Burnout
  • Personal time
  • Discontent
  • Morale
  • Productivity
  • Proper delegation
  • Team trust
  • Employee well-being
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