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It is better to have one true friend than all the acquaintances in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#friend #acquaintances #world
It is a common thought that having a lot of
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 friends is worse than having a real friendship with someone. From my perspective, I completely
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this
 statement and
this
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 in
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.
First
 and foremost, people can be true of them which means that there is
no
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 necessary to mould themselves as ideal models to please others.
On the other hand
, a true
friend
 can accept and understand the whole of us including the negative parts.
Conversely
, the relationship with acquaintances is
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fragile.
For example
, they might believe rumours from someone who hates us and break up the friendship. The public often
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 they like something in order to get along with other individuals well. Some
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people
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 tend to hide their true
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 to join the groups so that they could become
one
 part of the group.
However
, with a
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 close
friend
, we can be real us freely and remove fake masks.
Secondly
, owning a relationship with the
one
 who knows you well is an important thing in our life. The role of a true
friend
 could take part in many special events of our long life and function the same as our families do. Even if there is a serious fight between each other, a strong friendship would never separate because they would still forgive and get back to each other at the end. In conclusion, though having
one
 true
friend
 only has pros and cons, it is still worth
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one
friend
 like that. After all, other individuals might not care about our thoughts and emotions, no matter we are in grieve or happiness.
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