Some people believe that violence on television and in computer has a damaging effect on society. Others, however, deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion on that issue?

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In Today's world Television play an important role in our lives. It has many benefits like we can watch the news, commercials, songs and so on ,
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, there are some negative effects it
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. Like computers, mobile phones, TV
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are excessively used by the children have bad impacts on them due to
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the rate of violence is increasing day by day.
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with, violent leisure series have many bad impacts on youngsters. If they watch these violent
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excessively
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all the time they think about these and try to use all the tricks and tactics in their real life.Due to
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they become very aggressive and start getting irritatingly on small things and matters.
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to
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, they try to solve the matters and situations as they have seen in the films and series.
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, some youngsters start drinking alcohol and start smoking after watching their favourite superstar.
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clearly shows the impact of Tv commercials and
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on kids. One solution to get rid of
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problem there are many solutions like elders should keep an eagle eye on their kids like what they do, where they go and what they watch
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check their friend circle and should
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spend quality time with them as well to hear the problems and give solutions to them. Not only that, the Government should make restrictions on the censor board who make all these violence enriched curricula, there should be an age limit
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a person of a particular age can watch these series.
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, in many countries laws have been passed which restrict youngsters from watching violent movies. In my opinion, parents should teach their children about the difference between real and reel life and there should be restrictions on violent
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if they want to save from bad company.
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,
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world will become a jungle.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • damaging effect
  • significant influence
  • desensitize
  • aggression
  • normalize
  • shape
  • beliefs
  • behaviors
  • vary
  • mitigate
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