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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
two
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 maps display the way to go to a
city
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 hospital in
two
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 different years.
According to
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two
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 maps, the
city
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 hospital is surrounded by Ring
Road
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. It is obvious that the location of the bus stop transfers to the southwest of the
city
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 hospital in 2010, which was alongside
the
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Hospital
Road
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 in 2007. The hospital staff and the public used to share a car park which is on the east side of Hospital
Road
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 in 2007, but a new car park is built
at
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 the east side of the
city
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 hospital and opened for public use in 2010.
Moreover
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, there are
two
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 circle roads are established on both conjunctions of Hospital
Road
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 to connect the bus stop in 2010.
Overall
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, the
city
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 hospital and Ring
Road
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 do not have much change between 2007 and 2010. The bus stop is moved to a new place.
Also
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, an extra facility by the hospital is added for parking. The original car park remains the size.
Two
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 roundabouts are made to fluent the route.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, city, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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