Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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although
deserts
are mostly visited by tourists where the environment is very tough and dry. There are both pros and cons
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I will mention some benefits and
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of visiting these areas along with examples. There are some positive points of going to
deserts
for tourists.
Firstly
, it is very adventurous because many individuals like to discover many new and spacious things.
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, technology is at its peak and
people
are engaged so much in it ,for
this
is a very easy way to earn money
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,many
people
want to collect many different and unique information to post it on social media apps
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instagram
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,
you tube
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etc ,and to get more views and likes.
For example
, many you tubers like Zaid Ali and Aqsa have their own channels in which they record their visits to different places to which,
however
, many
people
cannot go owing to, many reasons but they wish to see those areas.
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the help of those you
tubers
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many
people
are able to watch and enjoy the places where they cannot go.
Moreover
, some
people
like to enjoy the activities which are only done on
deserts
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instance, quad biking and dune bashing.
In contrast
, there are some disadvantages of visiting
deserts
.
Firstly
,
people
who visit
deserts
sometimes face many problems related to food and drinks.
For example
, many
people
had sunstrokes and get unconscious owing to, severe sweating and lack of water intake. After having discussed the pertinent points it can be inferred that
although
,there are both positive and negatives aspects of visiting
deserts
.
Hence
, tourists who visit
deserts
for adventures or any research must pay heed to
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excess amount of water and food with themselves
consequently
, their tour will be easy and successful for them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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