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Nowadays many people chose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Which might be this the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Actually, these days
number
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 of freelancers is drastically increasing. Since being self-employed is getting beneficial for
people
 with opportunities that it creates, even company workers are choosing it.
However
, there are drawbacks
in
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 freelancing that will be given in
further
 paragraphs. To start with, many human beings who
work
 for some organizations are losing the desire to go on employing in a particular
work
.
Consequently
, as the conditions of freelancing
is
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 more flexible and create
the
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freedom for
people
 rather than an ordinary job, the number of self-employed
people
 is rising day by day.
For instance
, copywriting is
also
freelancing
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a freelancing
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 job when
person
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a person
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write
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 and sell
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texts for advertisement or publicity materials. Copywriters are scheduling a worktime and the conditions of working on their own which might eliminate the fact of pressure or stress in comparison to company
work
.
Thus
, being able to be self-employed create good
standarts
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standards
 to
work
 and increase the amount of salary.
However
, the disadvantages cannot be ignored.
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Freelancers
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Freelancer
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A freelancer
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 could spend some period of time working on projects alone. So it could lead to
lose
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communicational
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communication
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 skills and working in
collective
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a collective
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 with
people
.
Moreover
, the risk of getting no
earnigs
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earnings
learning
 is high since it depends on clients
order
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orders
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. Occasionally the demand for service of freelancers may decrease.
Also
, the cons could be the phenomenon of distractions while working. At any time your friends or other potential disturbances may occur so it is required to be well-organized and self-concentrated.
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 it might affect on projects deadline and
following
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 your plans. To conclude,
this
 type of
working
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 have drawbacks that
requires
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from
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self-employed
people
the
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 high awareness of the situation and at the same time offers many flexible chances to increase
the
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their
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 income and create enough good
life
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living
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 conditions.
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