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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people why might be the case do you think this is a positive or negative situation

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many
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 countries around the world it is vital for people to
buying
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buy
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a
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 own home rather than
paying
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pay
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 rent.there could be multiple
reason
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reasons
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 for
such
occurence
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occurrence
occurrences
;
however
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this
 is
this is
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disadvantageous to a large extent. Both the questions would be answered
further
. Examining the root causes the prime one is that the overall income of the person is increasing nowadays.every individual
get
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higher
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a higher
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 amount of money so that they decided to invest their income into homes lands and other things.
moreover
 human being can decorate their new house by
own
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 test.in renting on
this
 type of activity prohibited
therefore
 it is
trend
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a trend
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 in society to buy a luxurious home and live with their family. Discussing the letter question as I mentioned
this
 has drawbacks to
a
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some extent. The biggest detriment is that
owing
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owning
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home
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a home
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 is not affordable for
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the middle
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middle class
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family
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families
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. Those who have less amount of salary and don't have
better
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a better
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 job they can't purchase
this
 level of
accomodation
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accommodation
 facilities. Another downside is
individual
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individuals
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 need
large
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some
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sum
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 of
money
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the money
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 at
initial
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the initial
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 stage.
this
 implies that purchasing a house requires cash which
enforce
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 people to take
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a loan
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loan
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loans
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 from banks.
For instance
 in India most of mankind have property loans to pay which causes an extra
finance
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 burden on them. In
conclusion
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 it can eventually
commented
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 that owning a property is crucial for
community
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the community
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 in today's world. It is mainly because of their higher income and it can affect for
lower class
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lower-class
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 society to get facilities. In my own words
first
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,first
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 people check their financial condition after that decide to purchase new chambers.
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