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With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are some controversial perspectives heating a debate over the fast development of
communication
technology
such
 as smartphones, tablets and other mobile devices. While
this
 advancement has its own pros and cons, I would contend that its
disadvantages
 still outweigh its advantages.
Communication
technology
 has globally connected everyone
,
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 and makes human’s life more convenient. Since
communication
technology
 was created,
people
 can communicate with each other much more easily than before, which made our life more comfortable.
For instance
, since Alexander Graham Bell invented the telephone,
people
 can communicate with each other without any difficulties. Those advantages have clearly proved that
communication
technology
 is potentially made if
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society uses it correctly.
Nevertheless
, these usages of
communication
technology
also
brings
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 out some
disadvantages
. While those
upside
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 of
communication
are
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 well-known, it would be unfair if the counterpart is ignored.
Communication
technology
 causes a very significant phenomenon in society, which is laziness. With the advancement of
communication
technology
,
people
 are more likely to rely on it. To give an instance,
instead
 of having a face-to-face conversation, teenagers prefer having an online meeting because of its convenience, which causes
teenagers’s
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 laziness. Not denying
those helpful usage
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 of
communication
technology
, its bad affection is more likely to be seen. If there are not any solutions for society’s laziness caused by
communication
technology
, the
disadvantages
 will significantly exist. Overall,
communication
technology
 has its own advantages and
disadvantages
,
however
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 those
disadvantages
 can be noticed more easily. If
people
 use
communication
technology
 in a reasonable way, it will be very helpful.
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