Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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Crime seems to be growing in
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of the nations in the
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of adolescent people. There are
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variety of violations that people can face,
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a few measures that can be implemented.
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, there is a drastic increase in social problems involving youngsters because more parents
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time at work than with their children. Unattended youths and their siblings intend to
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hours more in front of the screen.
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, on
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websites,
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can be easily found instructional videos for just about any
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that you can think of. With the extensive use of
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smartphones
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,
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anyone can type numerous kinds of search words in the search engine.
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, we must consider
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and stress caused to them in their very early stage of life and being called
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a criminal. The initial legal process’s pressure is observed comparatively enormous than the adults on them. Turning to possible solutions, probably the most effective measure is parents should consider balancing their work and life ranging from putting a place to have a flexible working arrangements agreement with their supervisor to
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taking an annual leave in conjunction with the school break.
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, to have a conversation with their children and agree on the house rules including but not limited to viewer discretion rule on the screen and time limit. Ultimately,
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to address
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,
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all schools
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introduced law and crime prevention lessons in their curriculum,
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could have a huge contribution
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their understanding of social norms and may well lessen the consequences.
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is a problem that has both social and physical effects, and the solution will require combined action by schools, parents and young people.
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