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These days in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers particulary in secondry school. What are the reasons for this and how could the problem be solved.

#countries #people #teachers #particulary #secondry #school
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agued
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 that number of people who wants to be a
teacher
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 in secondary are decreasing by the time.
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 could be caused by some problem. In
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essay
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 I will explain
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the issues and how to solve them.
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 of all,
educator
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the educator
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 problem in many developing
country
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countries
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 is low income. They have
many
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responsibility
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responsibilities
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 at work
such
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 as giving
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a lesson
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lesson
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lessons
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 and guiding
student
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attitude
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attitudes
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. To support high
expectation
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expectations
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 for them,
government
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the government
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 must regulate
about
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minimal
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 wages, so they can focus to work without worry something else.
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, junior high school teachers must teach about biology,
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another
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apply
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and
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hand
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 they
also
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 must supervise the scholar attitude in the class. That's why higher income could increase
youngster
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youngsters
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 interest to be a
teacher
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.
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, some of the best fresh graduate
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student
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students
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 tend to be a researcher or
entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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 because it is more challenging.
Educator
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The educator
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 profession
demand
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 someone to do routine activity and for some
people
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 it is not challenging and boring. Changing the existing curriculum to allow
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teacher
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teachers
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 and
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student
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students
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do
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 some research could be a challenge for them.
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, Singapore have
curriculum
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a curriculum
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 that
allow
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teacher
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 and
student
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 in junior high school to do
a
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research, it caused
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positive
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 impact
for
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 them.
Thus
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,
youngster
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youngsters
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 do not find room for improvement in that profession and school must provide it to attract them to be one of educator In conclusion, there
are
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 some
problem
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problems
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 that
cause
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 young people do not
want
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 to be a
teacher
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such
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 as low salary and the profession
is
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to
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 boring. In purpose to increase the interest,
government
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the government
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 must change the regulation about minimum wages and curriculum to allow
scholar
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scholars
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do
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to do
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 some
reasearch
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research
 to
challange
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challenge
 them.
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