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Many people prefer to live in their own house, while others are prepared to live in rental properties. Discuss both views, give your own opinion and examples.

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Nowadays the majority of people prefer buying a
home
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 or apartment
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 of renting one due to the high amount of renting per month. Others choose to live in rental properties for the long term. I strongly believe that owning a
home
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 is a vital achievement for a lot of families and
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 essay will elaborate on
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 idea. On one hand, individuals pay expensive fees for rent monthly almost a quarter of their wages. So they prefer to apply for a real estate loan for owning their
home
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. Since the amount paid for debt is almost the same pay for the rent.
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, after completing the financial value of the properties the person owns her or his
home
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 without paying forever.
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, my uncle buy an apartment with a loan, he paid 1000 dollars Canadian monthly and after 20 years he owns now a beautiful apartment.
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, many people can purchase a domicile but they have
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 some priorities in their lives.
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 as humans who work for multinational companies so they have to work in many countries. For that, they opt for renting. Or other populations like better
traveling
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travelling
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 around the world and discovering a lot of cultures than paying always for a building.
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, John Edward is one of the celebrities who choose to do a trip around the world with his van. To sum up, owning a mansion is an essential investment since the house is the place where individuals have memories together, live, and settle down with their family.
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,
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 place is still the root of our ancestry.
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