Increasing the price Of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective?

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It is often argued that the rising of
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price decrease traffic jam and air pollution.
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positive
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point
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of increasing the price, I think there
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also
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of that policy.
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the one hand, the rising
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amount
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of
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to buy
petrol
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cause people harder to buy it. People either in
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or rural
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need to
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their
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daily life including
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transport. If it is hard to buy, many people choose
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of transportation.
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the community
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community
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communities
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move to
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the unmotorized
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vehicle
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vehicles
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bicycles
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to save their
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. That's why
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higher
petrol
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price lead to
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decrease
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number of cars operated.
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the other hand, high
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cost
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costs
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will lead to
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of
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of
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to buy basic needs. It is caused by rising expenditures for
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company
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companies
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since
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is one of the cost
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. That condition will affect another aspect of
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the economy
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as inflation.
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, in 2006 there are escalate
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oil
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in Indonesia which cause big inflation and
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to starvation of basic needs.
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increase
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of
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oil
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cause
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an economics
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economics
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impact. In conclusion, though there are
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of
petrol
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increase
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as less traffic jam and air pollution,
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think some drawback followed after the increasing like economics impact.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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