Increasing the price Of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective?
It is often argued that the rising of
oil
price decrease traffic jam and air pollution. Although
there are
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the positive
point
of increasing the price, I think there Fix the agreement mistake
points
are
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also
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a negative
the negative
point
of that policy.
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points
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the amount
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to buy petrol
cause people harder to buy it. People either in urban
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the urban
area
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spend
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to
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on
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another modes
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other modes
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communities
unmotorized
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the unmotorized
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vehicle
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vehicles
such
as bicycle
to save their Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
money
. That's why,
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apply
petrol
price lead to descrease
number of cars operated.
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decrease
decreased
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the other hand, high Change preposition
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petrol
cost
will lead to Fix the agreement mistake
costs
increase
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an increase
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the amount
money
to buy basic needs. It is caused by rising expenditures for logistic
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the logistic
company
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companies
oil
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. That condition will affect another aspect of Change to a plural noun
components
economy
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the economy
such
as inflation. For instance
, in 2006 there are escalate of
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oil
in Indonesia which cause big inflation and lead
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led
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the increase
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oil
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an economics
economics
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benefits
petrol
increase such
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite