Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

Some authorities think that it is more
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for pupils who
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at the
school
dormitory during the semester
instead
of living in off-campus housing.
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both sides of the argument, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, opponents of boarding schools point
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living in a
dorm
means less freedom because of the
dorm
rules and politics.
For instance
,
students
are concerned about the issue of choosing suitable
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and controlling the tenants
such
as parties, noises, and games. Another argument is,
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youngsters prefer to have more privacy in their own
life
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.
However
, if they choose to live at
school
they probably would have less privacy
due to
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spreading
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and gossip
between
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students
.
By contrast
, supporters of boarding schools say that
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learned outweigh the disadvantages. They highlight the independence and assertiveness that a student will acquire, in areas
such
as time management and interpersonal skills.
In other words
,
students
who live on campus tend to make new friends more easily and save more time for commuting immediately.
In addition
, living in a
dorm
provides those who focus on only the studies
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away from household
works
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. They don’t need to know how to cook and do
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cleaning, because the
dorm
rooms are usually furnished and come with
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meal
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,
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and most importantly kept clean by janitorial staff. In conclusion, my own feeling is that a boarding
school
can indeed be a useful activity, with independence, time management and focus mainly on studies. It seems that living on campus may lead
students
to have
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path
of
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years.
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  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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