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Marketing and promotion is the key to a succesful business. To what extend do you agree?

#promotion #business
Marketing and promotion
is
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 what
make
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makes
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 a
business
 successful.
This
 essay will discuss promotion and marketing
is
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as
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one
 of the
key
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of
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to
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successful
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, despite a good
product
 or
service
is
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being
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 the main factor to
successful
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a successful
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business
. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 both are responsible for
successful
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a successful
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business
. Marketing is essential to make a
business
 profitable and
also
 stand up from other big
business
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businesses
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. Marketing has the function of
introduced
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introducing
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 and
promoted
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promoting
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product
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products
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 or
service
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services
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 to
potencial
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potential
 customers. Without marking the
potencial
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potential
costumers
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customers
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 may never be aware of your
business
 offering and the
business
 may not able to progress and succeed. Marketing is beneficial and so name ways, but a good
product
 and
service
 is
essencial
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essential
 to retain
client
, for
exemplo
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example
, if
one
 company have
a
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apply
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good marketing but do not offer good
service
, the clients will
may
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not come back or
one
 small company have a good
product
,
however
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 do not have marketing,
first
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,first
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 the
potencial
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potential
 clients will never know about the
product
 and
service
 and
this
 may lead to sales crash. Once your
product
, reached
the
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apply
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potencial
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potential
costumers
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customers
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, it
increase
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increases
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 the
potencial
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potential
 to purchase their
product
 . In
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addition
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addiction
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addition
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 to that when
i
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I
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client
 have good experience with
one
product
 or
service
, they will
recomende
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recommend
recommended
 for friends or family, rising
they
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their
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 sales; without employing marketing strategies. In conclusion, marketing and good
product
/
service
 complement each other, a
business
 can not be successful without
this
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these
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 key features,
one
 is responsible to make
client
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the client
a client
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 aware of a
product
/
service
 and
other
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the other
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 is what
make
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makes
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 retain
client
, which bring more money in
long
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the long
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 term.
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