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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

#years #shops #customers #travel #centers #malls #development
From
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past
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the past
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 few years,
people
 choose to shop from
malls
 or shopping
centres
 and avoid visiting local
stores
 and that
reasons
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reason
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 many local
stores
 has
shutdown
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shut down
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. In my opinion, shopping
malls
 are a positive development for the
nation
 and
also
 for the citizens as well. Nowadays,
people
 prefer to visit shopping
centres
 or
malls
 for shopping because they find that place convenient and
time saving
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 as they do not need to travel
different
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to different
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 places to shop
their
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for their
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 daily necessities. Apart
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from
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form
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from
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 that, shopping
malls
 are the
one stop
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one-stop
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 shopping solution for everyone because
people
 find everything in a single place
such
 as clothing
stores
, footwear, jewellery
stores
, cosmetics, eyewear, etc.
Also
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 it is a sign of
developing
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a developing
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nation
 where
malls
 and shopping
centres
 are constructed in nearby areas for the citizens.
Moreover
,
economical
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the economical
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 growth of shopping
malls
 have a big role in national GDP growth for every
nation
 as well because compare to local
stores
malls
 have a huge monthly turnover and from
that
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 the government gets
huge
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a huge
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 amount of taxes. Apart from that, many foreign shopping brands establish their
stores
 in all over the world where they can run and expand their business which is a very good sign of developing for any
nation
 and from that business local citizen can get employment opportunities
as well as they
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, as well as they,
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 need local employees to run their businesses which can help to reduce unemployment of the
nation
. To sum up
this
, development in shopping
centres
 and
malls
 are well convenient for
people
 in
this
fastest growing
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fastest-growing
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 world, but it
also
 develops national economical growth as well which is a positive development for any
nation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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