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Too much money is spent in maintaining and repairing old buildings, some people think they should be knocked down and give way to modern building. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 in Zetland use their
smartphones
 for different purposes. My project, which I am still working on, is aimed at finding out the ways of using
smartphones
. I have found some data on
this
 issue presented in the bar chart. It can be seen that
people
 mostly use
smartphones
 for sending emails (79%) and making phone calls (78%). Whereas the percentage of paying for purchases is the lowest (15%). The amount of surfing the internet is 10% higher than the
amount
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number
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 of playing games which is 58% and 48% respectively.
However
, it is familiar to us to know about the overusing of
smartphones
.
This
 negative side of using
smartphones
 makes
people
 isolated from the real world leading to serious physical and psychological problems. The best solution to
this
 problem is to encourage
people
 to do more physical activities and spend time outdoor and limit
people
 from excessive use of gadgets. I would like to say that the role of
smartphones
 plays a vital role in our contemporary world.
Smartphones
 provide opportunities to communicate with
people
 at a distance, find a different kind of information and much more which makes our lives easier and more interesting.
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