A friend of yours is thinking of going on a campus holiday for the first time this summer. He / She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follow: Dear….,

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Dear Anna How's it going? Hope you are doing well and am very excited to go with you

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camping coming

saturday

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. I think you will enjoying a lot because the place where we are going is awesome. The weather is nice

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these days so we gonna spend some time on

beach

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as well .

In these

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days there is

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markets

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in the evening as people came from different countries .

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one more thing we will do

cycling

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and

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spent time in the night near the jungle . Apart from

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some

disadvanges

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disadvantages

like in

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season flies in the night so that's why

its

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little

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difficult to sleep at night and

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we can't able to choose our favourite place because lots of school children and other people come to enjoy their holidays .

Other

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thing is that at the moment on that side road was closed due to construction work .

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think in the middle of

summer

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months is best for us to go

for

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camping as

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free and work is

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quite

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so that

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can easily get days off from my work . Let me know which month is ok for you . See u soon

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lovingly Toni

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

212 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

tent
campfire
hiking
backpacking
campsite
wilderness
reconnect
tranquility
camping gear
outdoor activities
adventurous
survival skills
weather conditions
ecotourism
teamwork
star-gazing
marshmallows
wildlife
nature trails
sleeping bags

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