Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that the good side of being rich is having an opportunity to help
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. I completely agree with
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, I would like to stay reasons to bein rich. Sure, many
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try to earn more capital to buy expensive things,
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as famous brans, other amenities and for travelling around the earth. But the most reason is to be a significant person and have
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. They think money is all, and that they give to having influence and rule the world. Those crowd CHANGE THE DETERMINER crowds It appears that the plural demonstrative Those
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. show examples are with lower consciousness maybe. But it right with one hand is it will be used for a good cause. Despite the temptations of the world, there are
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, who think not only about their wealth but
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want to improve
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world and help
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, there are many billionaires and millionaires who always doing
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, even have their own charity organizations.
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, the Charity Fond of Bill and Melinda Gates. They always donate and help
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.
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, many TV stars,
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as actors, singers are engaged in charity work. To continue above pointed view, about use
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of money for good causes, I would like to give an explain some stars, who are UNESCO Goodwill Ambassador. There are stars, they are rich and they are the ones who are an example for
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. They can use their
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to influence more
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and help children. There are a lot of
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examples. In conclusion, I completely support
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claim, because I want to be rich too, to help
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, to open factories, provide
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with jobs and help vulnerable
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to make them happy. It is the most advantage of having more capital and
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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