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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #opportunity #study #part #courses #countries
In recent
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years
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 number of foreign student visas in many countries. In my opinion, the former proposition has become more rational.
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 according to my point of view , increased demand
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 studying in
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 countries arises and it will lead to some positive and negative comments which will
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 lead to
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 conclusion. Apparently, there are myriad
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reasons why students
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 to learn
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 knowledge in different states .
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 and foremost , while studying it is helpful for the youth generation to get jobs as same time period. They will stay away from their homes and
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new environment and how they need to develop different skills .
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, It has tremendous benefits like getting jobs in
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 field and
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 without their parents.
Moreover
 , they will learn how to live in different cultures and become more responsible .
On the other hand
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 that if
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 children live far from them they have no control
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 them and their mental status will
also
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 like they will get bad habits easily .
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Chiefly
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home sickness
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homesickness
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 in some adults will
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 their
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mental
 health which will lead to
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 psychological problem. In my profound opinion, one can lead to a conclusion that
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 of studying abroad are more as compared to their drawbacks. If the institutions provide all facilities
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 campus and meet all the necessary needs
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 it will decrease the concern of their parents and it will help
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 generation to study freely and gain success
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and
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