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The graphs below show the number of hours people spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of hours people spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates, the time spent on social media namely Facebook,
instagram
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Instagram
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, linked in and
snapchat
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Snapchat
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,
whereas
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 the pie chart represents the purpose of usage in a day from 2010-2016.
Overall
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of people used snap chat and the least being
linkedIn
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LinkedIn
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users in a day. In regards to
reason
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the reason
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 why they used social
platform
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platforms
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,
vast
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a vast
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 percentage of people used
for
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it for
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 communication
purpose
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purposes
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,
while
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 only
few
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a few
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 proportions were noted for watching videos. When observing the line graph, most of the public preferred Snapchat and they spent at least 5
hours
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in
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at
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 the beginning of 2010 and reached
the
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a
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 peak in 2012 for 6
hours
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usage
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of usage
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 and later faced a little downfall to 5
hours
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 in 2014, and the continued to rise in regards of time in 2016. when compared with Snapchat, LinkedIn started as a
platue
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place
till
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in
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 2012 and with
the
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a
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 dramatic rise of usage up to 2
hours
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 till 2014 and later continued to slide down. The Pie chart shows a greater percentage of about 58 is been used for communication purposes,
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then
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than
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 28% for shopping and the lowest
been
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has been
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 used for streaming videos.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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