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Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people' salaries to pay for public services such as roads and schools. Other thinks high taxes are bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some that using
tax
 revenues from
people
's
income
 for public related services
such
 as schools, roads and hospitals would be appropriate while others think it could be a burden to the
people
.
However
, the issue is not entirely straight forward and arguments can be made against the idea. In my point of view, high
taxes
 in undeveloped
countries
 could be a nightmare for the
people
. On the one hand, it is commonly understood that the high taxing is a kind of support
country
 economy. Government use these revenues to upgrade required services for the
people
.
For instance
, in most European
countries
, 40% of
tax
 needs to be paid from their
income
.
As a result
, the government provides free healthcare services so it becomes an advantage to the
people
. It means that
people
 are without worrying about expenses for their medical bills in their life.
This
 kind of situation cannot be seen in the low
taxes
'
countries
.
On the other hand
, the high taxing encourages lost productivity because
people
 are thinking that it is no point in having a high
income
, at the end of the day, they have to pay a huge amount from what they earned for a
tax
.
Moreover
, high
taxes
 in undeveloped
countries
 suffer to the
people
 mostly affect medium and low standard.
Consequently
, they try to find a way out avoiding
tax
. It creates a lot of fraudulent cases and fake
income
 slips to hide their actual earned. That really gives a negative effect on the
country
 economy in long run. To sum up,
although
tax
 revenues are directly supporting the
country
 economy in one way, it should be considered whether
people
 of the
country
 are capable or not. Meaning, high or low
taxes
 should be depended on the
country
's economic situation. In my opinion, high taxing shouldn't be taken all incomes of the
people
. If the government really needs financial support, it should
tax
 much higher
to
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 the
people
 who earn a lot.
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