Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people' salaries to pay for public services such as roads and schools. Other thinks high taxes are bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is believed
by
some that using Change preposition
apply
tax
revenues from people
's income
for public related
services Add a hyphen
public-related
such
as schools, roads and hospitals would be appropriate while
others think it could be a burden to the people
. However
, the issue is not entirely straight forward and arguments can be made against the idea. In my point of view, high taxes
in undeveloped countries
could be a nightmare for the people
.
On the one hand, it is commonly understood that the
high Correct article usage
apply
taxing
is a kind of support Replace the word
taxation
country
economy. Change noun form
country's
Government
use these revenues to upgrade required services for the Correct article usage
The government
people
. For instance
, in most European countries
, 40% of tax
needs to be paid from their income
. As a result
, the government provides free healthcare services so it becomes an advantage to the people
. It means that people
are without worrying about expenses for their medical bills in their life. This
kind of situation cannot be seen in the low taxes'
Change noun form
taxes
countries
.
On the other hand
, the
high Correct article usage
apply
taxing
encourages lost productivity because Replace the word
taxation
people
are thinking
that Wrong verb form
think
it
is no point in having a high Correct pronoun usage
there
income
, at the end
of the day, they have to pay a huge amount from what they earned for a tax
. Moreover
, high taxes
in undeveloped countries
suffer to
the Verb problem
cause
people
mostly affect
medium and low Wrong verb form
affecting
standard
. Fix the agreement mistake
standards
Consequently
, they try to find a way out avoiding
Change the verb form
to avoid
tax
. It creates a lot of fraudulent cases and fake income
slips to hide their actual earned. That really gives
a negative effect on the Verb problem
has
country
economy in Change noun form
country's
long
run.
Correct article usage
the long
To sum up
, although
tax
revenues are directly supporting the country
economy in one way, it should be considered whether Change noun form
country's
people
of the Correct article usage
the people
country
are capable or not. Meaning, high
or low Correct word choice
that high
taxes
should be depended
on the Wrong verb form
depend
country
's economic situation. In my opinion, high taxing shouldn't be taken all
incomes of the Change preposition
from all
people
. If the government really needs financial support, it should tax
much higher to the people
who earn a lot.Submitted by yannaunghlaing on
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