Some people feel that boarding school (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

It is often said that children benefit from living in
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, especially in today’s crowded world.
However
, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
also
be made against the idea.
This
essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, opponents of
dormitory
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dormitories
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point to the freedom involved in areas
such
as many rules, less privacy,
dorm
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and dorm
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politics.
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is almost
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as living with their parents and still thinking
opinion
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opinions
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of those
due to
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and gossip.
Secondly
, it appears that negotiating with someone you never know before is
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for those who are grown age.
This
can make either one of them miserable
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their life during their study.
Finally
, there is a concern over the peace of young people if there is
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close by.
This
might make them
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when they speak to others
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.
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or arguing with anyone at their
dorm
is a poor start to an academic career, after all.
On the other hand
, supporters of
dormitory
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dormitories
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say that the skills learned outweigh the disadvantages, they highlight
the
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making friends through
dorm
life might
last
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among
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their lives. Friendship may lead to career achievement, browsing hobbies and even taking care of someone. They
also
say that living in student housing is less time as well. Students
able
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to save their time
than
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instead
for
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using commute,
thus
cancelling out the costs involved.
Furthermore
, boarding school is cheaper than off-campus, whether you choose
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plan or not. In conclusion, my own feeling is that a dormitory can indeed be a useful choice, with experience leading to improved skills that are invaluable in the future. Of course,
this
is provided that the year is planned carefully and used for something genuinely worthwhile.
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