You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
letter finds you in a good health .My name is Vivek and I have seen your advertisement in an Australian magazine. I am writing
this
letter to request you to consider me for the
job
which you have posted .In
this
letter
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I will enumerate details about my skills and work
experience
.Please allow me to elaborate on exactly why I would like
this
course of action to be realized.
Firstly
, I would like to draw your attention
towards
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my prior
experience
which I have especially in
this
field .I am carrying a ten plus
year
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years

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of
experience
in Child healthcare .I believe my passion
towards
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for

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the
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apply

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young ones
make
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makes

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me a suitable candidate for
this
job
.
This
explains clearly my likes towards your posted
job
.
Secondly
, I am
person
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a person

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with trans quality ,equanimity and humility . I am a
person
who is very fond of children. Adding to it I am a flexible
person
,can work in
shift
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shifts

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. I reckon
above mentioned
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above-mentioned

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skills and
experience
makes me
perfect
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candidate.
Lastly
, I
also
want to share some details ,
how
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about how

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I leverage my free
time
in Australia. In my free
time
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I work in
crutch
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the crutch
a crutch

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,where I handle 20 children at a
time
.These all children are of different nature .I love to spend
time
with them . I am assertive that u can empathize
my
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with my

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situation and consider me as
suitable
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a suitable

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person
for your
job
,as keeping my skills and
experience
in mind. Awaiting
for
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your kindest consideration. Regards, Vivek Vidhya
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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