The charts below show the changes in ownership ofelectrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership ofelectrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
line
graphs depict trends
of
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electrical
appliances
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usage
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and the
hours
spent on doing
house
chores
among
households
in a country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, the first
line
graph
shows that there was a steady increase
of
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usage
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the usage
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of electrical appliances (washing machines, refrigerators and
vacuum
cleaners) among the
households
and
in
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the
second
line
graph
, it represents that there was a decrease in
hours
spent by these
households
in
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doing
house
chores
. In the first
line
graph
, there were only 40% and 30%
households
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of households
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using washing machines and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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respectively,
while
none used
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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in 1920. Within 20 years, the
usage
of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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experienced
steep
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increment by 90%,
while
both
usage
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usages
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of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vacuum
cleaners remained steadily
increase
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. By 1980,
usage
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the usage
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of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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reached its peak and became
plateau
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a plateau
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, followed by
usage
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the usage
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of
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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which reached its peak in 2000.
However
, the percentage of
usage
of washing
machine
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machines
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, apart from a slight dip in 1980, continued to be slightly unchanged from 1960 to 2019.
On the other hand
,
second
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line
graph
illustrates
gradual
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the gradual
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decrement
of
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hours
spent on hour
chores
by the
households
. In 1920, a household spent 50
hours
per week
to do
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the
house
chores
such
as washing clothes, preparing meals
,
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and cleaning.
However
, the number of
hours
spent dropped significantly by 30
hours
, to 20
hours
per week in 1960. From 1960 until 2019, the number of
hours
spent remained slightly unchanged. The
hours
spent on
house
chores
in 2019 only dropped by 10
hours
, in comparison with 1960.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, second, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, usage, hours, house, chores, households, graph, vacuum, refrigerator with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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