IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Some people say it is the government responsibility to transport children to school. Others believe parents should transport their children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #government #responsibility #transport #children #school #parents
In the past,
children
 used to go to school by themselves on foot or by bicycle, and
parents
 do not need to worry too much since most of the schools reside in the nearby vicinity. With the huge spike of traffic at present, adults need to give more attention regarded to the road safety of their
children
. Even though most people argue that transporting facilities to schools should be arranged by the government, some of them believe that
parents
 have to take that responsibility. According to my view, both have pros and cons, which I am going to highlight in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, arranging the school buses by the government will give the convenience for working guardians since it only costs less charge and these bus routes are aligned according to the neighbourhood. Rather adults can usher their child wherever the nearby stand come to fetch them.
For instance
, most developed countries have a dedicated vehicle service to facilitate
this
 service, which can be seen in documentaries and movies.
However
, the driver has to handle the security of all the
children
, which is risky.
On the other hand
, if
parents
 can transport their own
children
, security will be fully assured. Since society is full of corruption, child abuse and drugs, adults can keep eye on their
children
, monitor their behaviour and act upon that.
Moreover
, since road accidents are rapidly increasing,
parents
 can take care diligently. To sum up, by considering the aforementioned facts, it can be comprehended, even though there are benefits and demerits in both cases, my opinion is without considering the financials or any other aspect,
parents
 have to take the responsibility of transporting their child to the school.
Submitted by susithapb on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: