Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school students to study literature, such as novels and poems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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novels
and songs are
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of their
time
for secondary school learners. To a major
extent
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bolster
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the viewpoint. My preference is explained
further
. The principal argument
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shall put forth is that senior school students have other subjects to
learning
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such
as science and technology.nowadays
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of pupils need more focus on applied science rather than
novels
and poems.it is because everything has done through computer and machinery so that they would
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more eyes on
such
topics. To add to the mentioned point at the age of 15 years when they are in high school their minds run behind technology and quickly excepted on various things relating to automation along with robotics.
Thus
they can't even think about
novels
and
fictions
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for them it is waste of
time
or distraction in
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study.
However
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it should not be overlooked that reading
novels
and poems is totally waste of
time
for those who are interested in literature
this
is more crucial than other aspects for them.they can bring knowledge and skills from books and poems to read different stories as well as singing talent
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therefore
it is not wasted effort for their own point of view. To close the discussion it can be eventually commented that literature is a vain attempt for
academic
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an academic
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student
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students
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instead
of learning
technological
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a technological
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subject
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;
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it is not worth of
time
for fascinated people. I believe that
this
type of topic
are
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not for
high
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the high
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scholar but for Juvenile in every
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