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Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Even though we know that bullying is an
irrespectful
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respectful
behavior
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 and that it can leave
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 impact on
children
, it still happens in some schools nowadays. In
this
 essay, I will explain why the reasons may be and what solutions can be taken to prevent it from happening. Bullying can seem normal for
children
 when they are not aware that their
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 is considered bad.
First
 of all, the
children
 may be not socialized enough to learn how to interact with peers properly. It may be the outcome of being the only child at home.
Therefore
, they do not have the
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 to understand how to treat
others
 who are at the same age.
Moreover
, there are
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 violent media on the internet,
such
 as bloody video games or series. Via the convenience of
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the internet
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, these materials are easy for
children
 to reach and
thus
 learn the violent
bahavior
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behaviour
 from them without knowing that it is wrong. It is possible to educate
children
 at schools and home to avoid bullying. By providing lessons and practices, teachers can demonstrate to the
children
 how to respect their classmates. In
this
 way, they can treat
others
 with better manners. At home, parents should monitor what their
children
 are learning from the internet and prevent them to get in touch with inappropriate media.
Furthermore
, when parents notice that their
children
 have the
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tendency to bully
others
, they should teach them the correct way to interact with
others
 immediately. To conclude, bullying can be caused by
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 of social practices and
children
-unfriendly online media.
Nevertheless
, it can be solved by
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education from teachers and parents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bullying
  • Harassment
  • Intimidation
  • Diversity
  • Adolescent
  • Mimic
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Cyberbullying
  • Peer pressure
  • Social acceptance
  • Awareness
  • Conflict resolution
  • Peer mediation
  • Consequences
  • Respect
  • Kindness
  • Open communication
  • Vulnerable
  • Buddy system
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