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Many young children have unsupervised access to the internet and are using the internet to socialize with others. This can lead to a number of dangerous situations which can be threatening for children. What problems do children face when going online without parental supervision? How can these problems be solved?

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"A good friend is a brother born for times of distress" so goes the old adage. Forming friendships nowadays has been made easier with the advancement in technology.
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, has done more harm than good especially to the young minds among users.
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 essay will highlight how
children
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 are taken advantage of by
people
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 with evil intentions, their exposure to pornographic material and how these issues can be tackled. Two factors are behind the dangers that lie as a snare for unsuspecting
children
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 during their
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 use.
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, because young minds are so eager to form friendships with almost anyone, they tend to reveal personal information about them to the person on the other screen without knowing the real person they chat with resulting in undesirable effects.
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, many sexual
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predators
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preditors
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desguise
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disguise
disguised
 themselves as
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 and make use of social
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 to build
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a friendship
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friendship
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friendships
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 with young
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who
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whom
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 they eventually
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harass
 upon coming into physical contact with them. The
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 reason linked to the
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 is
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,
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parents
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 may have forewarned them about
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the danger
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 of pornography,
children
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 can still view
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 materials on the
internet
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 especially with no or little parental oversight. To illustrate, some
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 only tell
children
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 not
watch
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 any immoral entertainment but do not take interest to check if the child does adhere to the counsel.
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In spite
 of these drawbacks about technology, there are ways
children
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 can be helped.
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 two methods can apply. The
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being
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 that
parents
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 should take an interest in knowing
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 their young adult is chatting with on social
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.
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,
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 of giving all the freedom to a child to communicate with strangers on social
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,
parents
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 should only allow friendships with
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 they know in person.
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, all devices that
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young
people
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 use to access
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internet
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the internet
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 should be stationed in an open room where everyone can be monitored when using it. Take
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, if a family uses a laptop to browse the
internet
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 or for social
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, they should put it in the living room so that they will be able to see what their child is watching
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avoid
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 incidences of immoral entertainment by young
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. In conclusion, regardless of the good that has come with the advancement in technology, parental
supervison
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supervision
 should take precedence in order to protect
children
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 from harm that can result from it. Stationing devices used for
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purpose
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purposes
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 as
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internet
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the internet
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open
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an open
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room
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 is one way among many. Parent interest in who their
children
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 are
befirending
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befriending
defending
 can not be over
emphazied
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emphasized
.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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