An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

More
people
have been buying products they need by using
the
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online.
Although
it is easier to get many items
this
way, I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks because society saved thousands of dollars each month. Many
people
have lost their
jobs
because local
stores
can not compete online. Many convenient
stores
have decided to close their business because It is hard to compete
with
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online.
Moreover
, it is expensive to rent a place and pay employees with a physical business.
Besides
, local places usually need more than 5
people
who take care of the customers compared to online that might need fewer employees.
For instance
, in California, many types of furniture
closed
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because they can not compete with Amazon specials. As result, hundreds of employees lost their
jobs
and some of them live as homeless. I believe that society should support local
stores
to help them to keep in business and avoid losing massive
jobs
. Society has adopted buying online because it is cheaper and easier to find what you want. These days, anyone does not need to leave their home's comfort to buy groceries, items of furniture or clothes because they can find anything they want with a single click. On top of
this
, prices are cheaper by buying online.
For instance
, American
people
love to buy products online by getting into Amazon because
this
store has
amazing
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return policy and it offers any product at a lower price. I'm of the opinion that buying at Amazon is a safer and cheaper place, so the clients will have more time to spend with their loved ones. As result,
people
do not get
stressful
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anymore when they need to do their grocery list because you can
also
have
this
service online.
Although
many
people
have lost their
jobs
, it might be worthy to be aware that thousands of
people
saved a big amount of money by using online
stores
. One must invest the money in places where they offer a great bargain and quality. For these reasons the positive far outnumber the negatives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • lack of physical interaction
  • try or test products
  • potential for fraud or scams
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