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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
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The charts give information on the rate of happiness for married and unmarried
people
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. The information provided is divided into different
age
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 groups and whether they have
children
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 or not.
According to
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 the first
chart
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 it shows how married
people
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 are happier than unmarried
people
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, regardless of their
age
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. In the first
chart
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 we can see that the happiest
age
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 group in which they are married are
people
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 aged between 18 and 29 years, but there is very little difference across the different
age
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 groups.
People
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 who aren’t married are generally less
happier
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happy
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 than married
couples
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, but
for
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apply
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people
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 aged 65 and over are happier than the other
age
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 groups but are still lower than married
couples
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. Among married
people
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, despite having
children
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 or not their rate of happiness is still quite constant. The trend is that married
couples
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 who have
children
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 under the
age
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 of 18 are shown to be a bit happier than
people
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 without
children
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 or who have
children
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 over the
age
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 of 18.
Overall
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, the charts clearly illustrate that married
couples
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 are far happier than unmarried
people
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 and
this
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 is regardless of the
age
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 group or whether they have
children
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 or not, it is a constant trend.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, children, couples with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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