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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
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The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried
people
 in the US
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 and the effect of
children
 on the
overall
 ratings of married
couples
.
According to
 the first
chart
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chart,
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 it shows how married
people
 are happier than unmarried
people
, regardless of their
age
. In the first
chart
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chart,
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 we can see that the happiest
age
 group in which they are married are
people
 aged between 18 and 29 years, but there is very little difference across the different
age
 groups.
People
 who aren’t married are generally less
happier
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 than married
couples
, but
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people
 aged 65 and over are happier than the other
age
 groups but are still lower than married
couples
. Among married
people
, despite having
children
 or not their rate of happiness is still quite constant. The trend is that married
couples
 who have
children
 under the
age
 of 18 are shown to be a bit happier than
people
 without
children
 or who have
children
 over the
age
 of 18.
Overall
, the charts clearly illustrate that married
couples
 are far happier than unmarried
people
 and
this
 is regardless of the
age
 group or whether they have
children
 or not, it is a constant trend.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, children, couples, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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