The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried
people
in the US
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and the effect of
children
on the
overall
ratings of married
couples
.
According to
the first
chart
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it shows how married
people
are happier than unmarried
people
, regardless of their
age
. In the first
chart
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we can see that the happiest
age
group in which they are married are
people
aged between 18 and 29 years, but there is very little difference across the different
age
groups.
People
who aren’t married are generally less
happier
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than married
couples
, but
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people
aged 65 and over are happier than the other
age
groups but are still lower than married
couples
. Among married
people
, despite having
children
or not their rate of happiness is still quite constant. The trend is that married
couples
who have
children
under the
age
of 18 are shown to be a bit happier than
people
without
children
or who have
children
over the
age
of 18.
Overall
, the charts clearly illustrate that married
couples
are far happier than unmarried
people
and
this
is regardless of the
age
group or whether they have
children
or not, it is a constant trend.
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