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in the future nobody will why printed newspaper and books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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present
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the present
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 era, due to
advancement
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the advancement
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 of technology
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next generation
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next-generation
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infants
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of infants
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 thinks
why
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about why
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 we
use
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physical
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a physical
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copy
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copies
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 of
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and other study materials
instead
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 of we are able to find and read everything on
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internet
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the internet
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 without paying
money
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.
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, the dilemma of it is needed
to
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for
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next-generation
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next
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the next
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 generation raises lots of controversies. The
further
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 paragraphs will be describing both
the
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sides of the coin before showing
concrete
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 decision at the end. To commence with, world and
childs
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children
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are become
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become
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 more and more clever.
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Next generation
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child
childs
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children
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use
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huge
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a huge
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 amount of
internet
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 in their daily life.
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, uses of technology in our routine, life becomes
more
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easier compared to without it.
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, colleges and schools
are
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use
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 modern apps
through
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to
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take
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taking
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 online classes and
provide
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providing
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 all education material online.
However
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, for making paper material, need to cut down trees and plants.
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, global warming and other
pollutions
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pollution
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 are increased regularly.
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,
for
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apply
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making physical copies of books and newspapers needed
machinary
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machinery
 and employment as well while online material
get
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gets
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 find easy and priceless. To exemplify, before covid 19 many societies prefer to read
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a newspaper
the newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 from xerox copy whereas after covid 19 more people uses online copy for
read
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reading
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 daily news.
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, online material saves
environment
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the environment
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 as well
time
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 and
money
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.
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, more utilisation of
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internet
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the internet
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 causes eye problems.
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, due to most of
work
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the work
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shift
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shifts
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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, more and more
community
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communities
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 become unemployed.
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, usage of
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internet
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the internet
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 saves
time
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 and
money
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 but sometimes it
get
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gets
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hacks
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hacked
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 by hackers.
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, sometimes server goes down of schools or government websites, that
time
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student
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students
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 and local society can not get download books or
newspaper
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newspapers
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.
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,
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use
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the use
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 of
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internet
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the internet
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 life
becomes
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become
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 easier but sometimes it becomes giant evil. To recapitulate, the aforementioned information above, I certainly agree because
benefits
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 of
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internet
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the internet
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 weigh more compared to drawbacks.
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, technology saves
money
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,
time
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 and
environment
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the environment
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 and make like simple and modern.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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