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Some people believe that university education should focus on the skills of employment for the future. Others think that university education should focus on academic study only. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Now many people have their own views about the lessons in universities, some people think
students
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 should learn more about the
skills
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 of employment for future. Others think they should
focus
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 on academic
study
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, I agree with d academic
study
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 and I do not think
college
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students
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 should learn
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employment
skills
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 in universities. In my opinion, I
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 with the people who think that
university
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 education should
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 on academic
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 only. Because I think
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university
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universities
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 as the institutions of higher education,
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should teach
students
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 more frontier knowledge to ensure that the
university
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at
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 a high academic level and develop more cutting-edge technologies. At the same
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 many
college
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students
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 choose to apply for a master’s degree。And I
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 with the view that
University
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 education should
focus
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 on
skills
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 of equipment for the future. Now many
students
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 may not find a job Which is related to their
college
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 major, so it is difficult for universities to decide what employment
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 they ought to teach
students
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.
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, now
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 companies have their own induction training and some companies events send
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old stuff as your teacher to teach you. So I do not think
college
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students
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 need to learn these
skills
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 in
university
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. As I see,
students
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 do not need to
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skills
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 in
college
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, they just have to
focus
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 on academic
study
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 only
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