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One of your colleagues was in charge of organizing an annual executive conference, and he/she has been successful in doing it. You want to congratulate your colleague on that. Write a letter to this colleague. In your letter, • congratulate your colleague for successfully organizing the event • mention what you liked about it the most • say how much you would like him/her to organize other events as well

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Dear Rohit, I want to congratulate you
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Diwali
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the Diwali
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 function which you organize in
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 excellent way in our school playground. I love your decoration which you have done with beautiful flowers and lights. It was really amazing. You
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 amazing job. All the students who join us in function
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 appreciate celebration most and they enjoy a lot while playing games, dancing and singing. After looking at your creativity
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 want to give you organization responsibility
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 all events in future. I know you will do
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 job in future too. I will
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 tell my family members and other friends about your skill and we will want to develop it by giving you more opportunities in society. Thank you. with regards, Raman
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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