People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons and solutions?

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It is true that
people
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are taking a lot of
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sugar based
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drinks .There are many reasons responsible for
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issue and effective steps need to be taken It
is commonly believe
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that an unhealthy diet
cause
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causes
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various health problems.As an explanation of
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, consuming more and more
sugar
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is not good for health . As obesity, diabetes and heart disease are on the top .
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was conducted in 2012 shows that
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of male
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more than female in regards
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the consumption of
sugar
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.
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they will suffer from several types of diseases too . On the other side , taking
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is good as well as it boosts our mind and
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us more energetic. To explain
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,
people
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who did
regularly
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a regularly
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physical activity
they
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prefer to take more
sugar
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as they
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their calories while doing exercise so they need to have some
sugar
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drinks to boost up their body .
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,most
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nowadays lead a sedentary lifestyle. In the past ,
people
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were more active in their jobs at home because they are taking good diet good amount of
sugar
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. But nowadays
people
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mostly did sitting jobs due to which they prefer more
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. To sum up , the solution to
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is
people
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have to do regular exercise to maintain their healthy body
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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