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Scientific research can be the most effective when done by private companies. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#research #companies
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Over the
last
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 few decades, the growth of scientific
research
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 has significantly improved as more private
companies
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 have undertaken
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 and development of products. I agree with the above statement.
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, Private institutions have much more financial freedom than a government subsidiary.
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, a private organization working on a product can use a lot of resources and they would not have any time restrictions for the creation of the particular result. They can
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 provide twice the amount of effect compared to their parallel.
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, private corporations could form an association with governments
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 to increase the development of a commodity if the necessity arises.
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, in the recent pandemic, the government and private
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 have combined their efforts in the
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 of a vaccine. Private organizations working on the vaccine have hastened the
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 done on the vaccine in recent times. To summarize, I agree that
research
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 done by private
companies
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 can be the most effective, as they can provide faster product development and have bigger financial outreach.
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