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Media
content produced by TV
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is playing a key role in educating the general public. A number of societies claim that the programs from
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electronic
media
such
as
television
must contribute to
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audiences knowledge, especially related to social problems. I personally agree that it is a big responsibility carried out by
television
management to present more comprehensive and reliable
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for their viewers.
To begin
with, the
media
researchers
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that a plethora of information disseminated through all
media
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to influence public opinion.
For instance
, when various
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entertainment
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television
publish certain
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such
as disaster
event
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in a particular destination, the channels should deliver trustworthy details as
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will be absorbed by all individuals watching the show. All talents
also
need to encourage their followers to be more sensitive
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the current situation and probably initiate social
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like
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donation. Another point to consider is
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benefit obtained by the
media
while they are providing positive contents.
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is because
media
aired
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important
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positively is tend to maintain their image in front of both sponsors and consumers.
For example
, if
television
stations run social projects and broadcast
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through their
media
channel, they have
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to attract more people to watch
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.
As a result
, a multitude of brands
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to spend their money on the shows as it generates high
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enggagement
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engagement
and brands might promote their products effectively during the sponsorship program. In conclusion, I absolutely agree that all
entertaintment
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entertainment
shows with
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level of popularity need to bring forth educational
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and contribute to
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viewers' knowledge and understanding, especially in terms of social issues
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