In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is a controversial issue whether state or family should take care of family members when they became older. In my opinion, the government is responsible for the elder generation. There are several reasons to consider
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life and pay taxes for the government and it's their right to use that state's resources and live in more cosy conditions when they get older. They need more care and help and their close family members like children and grandchildren maybe have no appropriate financial sources and help at that time, so
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should support
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population. The
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can get professional medical help from nurses, in case of family members maybe have not enough education about medicines, and have no skills like measuring blood pressure or giving appropriate insulin
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and etc. special knowledge about caring elder folk. Another advantage of elder
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can be the possibility of socializing older
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issues like feeling depression, loneliness, anxiety and dimension problems. So elderly homes is a good environment for socializing of
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approximately with the same age and have good opportunity to spend time together all day long, sharing their knowledge and experiences. Because as we know, human is
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object and can't live alone. In
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they can make friendships and even find soul
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which can have a positive effect on their health. ,
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I can say that totally agree with the idea that
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should take care of
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and pay for elder homes because of the reasons I shared above and mostly because of getting professional medical help and the opportunity of socializing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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