Buying things on the internet. Such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

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Online shopping has
becoming
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more and more convenient and useful. people can buy
things
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like
correct
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a correct
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ticket
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tickets
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,
textbook
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textbooks
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or bags from
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shopping system.
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essay will discuss the positive and negative
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of
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trend. Shopping on the internet has
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chance of buying the wrong thing or something that doesn't meet your needs
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as clothes.The real cargo may have a diff size or a colour difference from the model clothes on the website.Buying
things
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online in some cases
it
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has become a limitation with some local
shop
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shops
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of residents,people are more likely to stay
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home
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and only move two fingers to get the goods they need.Because of
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reason,many people prefer
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convenient and lazy approach.
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buying or booking
things
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on
internet
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the internet
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has these several disadvantages,it can let the people who choose it stay in a various
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lifestyle
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life style
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.The most obvious point is that online shopping can provide different prizes of one
goods
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in many sellers, it
give
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customer
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the customer
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a chance to compare
its
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with all the way.
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, another useful
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is that if you want to buy a very popular dress or tickets in a
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,booking in
local
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shop sometimes may let you miss
its
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, but shopping online can finish
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problem.
Advantages
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and disadvantages of buying
things
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online are all makes sense,but
in
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some
reasons
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advantages are more outweigh
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the disadvantages one for its convenience and diversity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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