2.Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, shopping online for a variety of things, including books, air tickets and groceries is increasingly more common. I believe that there are more positive aspects of
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, buying things online is not perfect. In
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I will discuss the convenience and the social life consequences of
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with, the lack of
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is the problem for many
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nowadays – there is not enough
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to do work and to spend
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loved ones. Considering that, online shopping is a great solution for modern civilisation as it saves
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, often goods are delivered for free.
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, during that
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we can cook a meal or watch a TV show with our families.
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, we can compare prices of the same product in different shops and choose the cheapest one.
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, shopping online is a great help for old
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, especially those who have disabilities. They do not have to carry
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bottles of water or milk, which could cause a lot of pain.
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, another group of
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that benefits from
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way of buying goods is
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in quarantine, as they cannot go out to buy what they need. What is more, they do not risk the health of their families to bring them shopping,
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online purchases are safer.
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shopping online has some flaws. The lack of social life is a huge problem now.
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,
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pandemic made social life even worse by not allowing us to see other
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for months.
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, going to a shop
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us to talk to strangers and share our concerns and feelings
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when buying goods over the Internet makes
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isolated and anti-social. To sum
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, shopping online is becoming very common nowadays. It is a good way to save
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and compare prices on different websites
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but
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makes individuals feel more lonely and inactive.
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, in my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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