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Even though globalization affects the world’s economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

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Never before have we seen so much globalization in every nation of the world.
This
 tendency has both advantages and disadvantages which both need our attention.
To begin
 with, I am of the belief that
this
 trend has contributed in order to
evolve
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 as a species. Has played a pivotal role in technological advances and of course in
economy
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the economy
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. To be more precise, multinational companies have invested trillions of euros in many
countries
 around the world and
this
 is conducive to the prosperity and progress of those communities and
theirs
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 citizens.
For example
, big corporations like Amazon, Apple and Nike have offices and factories in both developed and developing
countries
 which decreases the unemployment ratios as they offer millions of jobs.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks of
this
 rampant trend well which should not be denigrated. Globalization has affected
negativelly
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negatively
 the heritage of many
countries
especially
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 western ones. A clear illustration of
this
 could be said to be that teenagers nowadays have the same interests regarding
entertaiment
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entertainment
, food and clothes. Why is
this
 a negative side? In my opinion, because our local and traditional morals and
customes
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customers
customs
 are disappearing.
For instance
, youngsters wear the same dressing code everywhere, eat junk food like burgers and pizzas
instead
 of traditional cuisine and listen to the same kind of music like
trap
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a trap
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. To sup um, even though globalization is advantageous and has been conducive to many
countries
 to thrive, has
this
 negative side which only through the concerted effort of citizens can it be eliminated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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