Some people believe that university education should focus on the skills of employment for the future. Others think that university education should focus on academic study only. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In today's university
education
, is the cultivation of employed skills or academic
study
more significant? There is a heated debate about
this
issue. Some people
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the former while others
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the latter. Obviously, with the popularization of
college
education
, the number of
college
students is increasing, and
employment
is becoming more and more difficult.
Moreover
, much of the knowledge in
college
courses is already beyond the requirements of most jobs
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and gradually begins to keep away from the basic requirements of social production.
Therefore
, for individuals, it is easier to gain recognition by companies to master practical
employment
skills. And most people go to
college
just to find a satisfying job. Based on these, I think
college
education
should take the cultivation of employed skills as the mainstream. Admittedly, nowadays, with the rapid development of science and technology and
economy
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, people's life has enjoyed unprecedented convenience and comfort. As we all know, science and technology is the
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productive force. And those achievements depend on progress in academic research. Countries are spending a lot of money to cultivate talents in academic
study
. Universities are the most important research institutions, and graduate students are the representatives of the scientific research ability of schools.
Therefore
, universities should focus on the cultivation of academic
study
at the graduate level rather than blindly at the university level. In a word, the mainstream of university
education
focuses on
employment
, which can reduce the increasingly tense
employment
problem. As for
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study
, it is more appropriate to focus on the postgraduate stage.
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